Lesson 2 Discussion
The two stories by Angelou and Cofer read for this week use a lot of description! The best kinds of description are those that use the five senses: sight, sound, smell, taste, and touch. These leave a lasting impression much stronger than just “telling” what happened. As a golden rule of description, “Show; don’t tell!” What is each author’s thesis (main idea)? What descriptions do they use to develop that main idea?
Lesson 2 Major Errors Discussion
1. Complete the following exercises from The St. Martin’s Handbook. Be sure to identify clearly the exercise, and write down the number of the question and the correct answer in full. Place all answers in one document
2. Post ALL of the exercises you completed as an attached file in your first posting to this discussion board. You will not be able to see other postings until you have posted your work. You will not be able to edit your own posts, so make sure that you attach your exercises in that first posting. You will not receive credit if you post “accidentally” the first time and then later post your homework because it would not be fair for you to have access to everyone else’s posted answers before posting your own exercises.
3. Review the exercises completed by at least two others. Spot at least five errors and explain the correct answers in your replies. Of course, no one is expected to be “perfect” in grammar, but sometimes, we are better able to spot errors in others’ work more easily than in our own. The purpose is to train your eye to look for these types of errors as practice for improving in these areas yourself in addition to providing helpful advice to others.NOTE: Your grade will be based on (1) the accuracy of your answers to the exercises that you provide in your first posting AND (2) your two replies to others made a clear attempt to be helpful.
GuidelinesYour participation is a valuable resource for both you and your classmates! Collaboration with me and others in the class is a great opportunity to practice critical thinking, reading, and writing. These discussions provide you the chance to:
You must post at least TWO messages of 150-words each to the discussion board on two NON-consecutive days EVERY week. Why non-consecutive days? You must give me and others as chance to read and respond to your posted messages before you respond again. This way, we can have a real discussion by giving others time to read/respond.
You are encouraged to participate much more than the minimum two messages each week! I post MANY follow-up questions/comments, and responding to me counts as one of your two required participation postings.
Each week begins on Monday and ends on Sunday. The dates for each week’s discussion are provided in the Syllabus.
You must also READ all of the postings from me and your classmates posted to the discussion board! Think of the discussions like a classroom meeting. Read everyone’s postings just like you would listen to everyone speak in a classroom meeting.
Keep the following important points in mind:
Write a 500-750 word essay using description as the chief method of development. Choose one of the following topics:
(If you would like to write about a different topic, send me a message describing this other topic. I must approve the topic before you write about it because some topics might not be good for this type of essay.)
Description focuses on developing an idea about something or someone. Description focuses on the following elements:
Choose a subject (a person, a place, an object, etc.) that you know well, for you will need to include many specific details and this can be difficult with a subject with which you are largely unfamiliar. It also helps to choose a subject for which you feel something (positive or negative) as it is difficult to write with interest (or to inspire interest in your readers) about a subject for which you feel nothing.
Give your description a sense of life by using multi-sensory details. Description must appeal to the senses: taste, touch sound, sight, and smell. While you need not appeal to every sense in your essay, be sure to give the reader enough description so that he/she can be a part of your topic’s development.
Sight is the easiest of the five senses to use; perhaps because the other senses are used less frequently by us in real life, they have a stronger impact when these senses are used to describe. The more senses you appeal to in your description, the stronger your description will be and the more completely your reader will understand your subject. Imagine you are describing the subject to a blind person—in some ways you are! In your essay, you show your readers a subject with which they are unfamiliar and in all likelihood unable to ever see.
Begin by listing as many details about your subject as you can think of. From there, you can choose the strongest details and discard the rest; if your list is complete enough, you will have too many details to fit into one essay. Then, group the details into logical (themed) sub-groups that you can turn into paragraphs.
For example, an essay describing a cat might be organized like this:
Body Paragraph 1: Physical Characteristics
Body Paragraph 2: Personality
Body Paragraph 3: Habits
Your thesis will identify the subject of your description and should make some statement about that subject. What is the single main idea that you want your reader to remember about the thing or person you are describing? That’s your thesis statement!
A thesis might be a lesson you learned from your subject or a strong emotional reaction to your subject. For example, if your description is about your well-beloved car, you might say that this car represents your desire to have the best things in life. Writing about an animal, you might say that owning a dog taught you responsibility. Possibilities abound. Considering why you chose to write about your subject and what importance that subject has to you will guide you to a thesis statement.
In your conclusion, refer back to your thesis, indicating again what significance your subject holds for you. The conclusion is your opportunity to talk about why this subject is important.
What should you avoid doing?
Ultimately, the assignment calls for a little creativity as you bring to life a subject for your reader. Try to have a little fun with it!
Post your rough draft (1 point) and complete a peer review for at least one other person in the class (4 points). Completing a peer review online requires several steps:
|1. Content DevelopmentWhat is the main idea of the essay? Do you have any suggestions for clarifying or modifying this main idea?Is there enough evidence to support the main ideas of each paragraph? If not, what other evidence might the author use?Are the main ideas of each paragraph logically supported by the examples and evidence in each paragraph? If not, what suggestions do you have to improve?Does the essay accomplish the purpose of the assignment? (For example, does Essay 1 effectively describe using sensory details, does Essay 2 provide a good story, does Essay 3 use strong examples, does Essay 4 compare/contrast with good reasons, and does Essay 5 provide a clear argument?)2. OrganizationAre the main ideas of each paragraph in a logical order to support the main idea of the essay? If not, what suggestions do you have to improve?Are transitions used within and between paragraphs to move the reader logically to the next point? If not, what suggestions do you have to improve?3. Language and MechanicsAre there any problems with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences, comma splices, or fragments? If so, what suggestions do you have to improve?Are there any proofreading errors? If so, what suggestions do you have to improve?4. OverallWhat part was the most effective or interesting?Was the main idea effectively communicated? Why or why not?|
Of course, submit your revised essay to me for grading and commenting by the due date indicated on the Syllabus.